05 September 2008

A Man Fell Down

A man fell down yesterday morning
Happened at a pedestrian crossing
Wasn't a serious circumstance
Yet his life hung in the balance

Couldn't get up on his own
Nearby in red stood his clone
The companion didn't look like he cared
'Cos he simply stood by and stared

Oh dear, what happened har?
Was he knocked down by a car?
Or assaulted by an enemy?
How it came to this I didn't see.

I approached the injured man cautiously
And took a photo of him discreetly
A few times he blinked at me
Before passing out momentarily
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Hahaha, gotcha didn't I?

14 comments:

stanley said...

Victor-hahaha, you got me fooled.A very interesting piece of poem.

Lam Chun See said...

Haha .... that's a good one. For a moment I thot you are so insensitive. Taking photo of someone when he is down.

But I did sense some trick coming up. Still it was nice to be tricked.

yg said...

you meant to keep us in suspense just like the 'green man' that was suspended. after looking at the picture, i enjoyed the poem more.

Icemoon said...

Ah, the poet Victor ^^

I want to comment on how you built suspense too. I notice there are 10 fullstops in between the brackets. It could be you copy 'n paste each block to speed up your process.

The end result is good user experience, because on my 1280x1024 desktop, the brackets and full stops are exactly 1024 high. What this means is there comes a time the poem disappears but the picture has still not appeared - a mystery zone, a tunnel of suspense.

Try it fullscreen on your browser and you know what I mean.

Icemoon said...

It is not 10 fullstops now. Guess I was dreaming when I wrote my previous comment. Dreaming of H-sub ah.

Victor said...

Thanks Stanley. I like to poke fun at people and situations once a while.

Victor said...

Chun See - I am only insensitive sometimes, not all the time. :p

Victor said...

YG - Glad you enjoyed the poem. I could have kept all of you in suspense longer by turning this into a quiz and then publishing the photo only 1 week later. Maybe the next time. Haha.

Victor said...

Icemoon - Aiyah, you are supposed to read the words of the poem, not count the number of fullstops. Haha.

Anyway, I have changed the number of fullstops from 10 to 7 just for you. :)

Ling That's Me said...

oh! you caught me!! :D

great poem!

tigerfish said...

Hahahhaa...so still can cross the road or not?

Victor said...

Tigerfish - Yes can, but you'll have to hand-walk, like this. Haha.

mummyji said...

wickedly clever!!

Victor said...

Mummyji - I shall take that as a compliment. Thanks. :)